Sample Descriptive Paragraph #1

I am using a different prompt from the one that has been assigned to you so that there will be little chance of accidental plagiarism. Do not use any phrases or ideas that I have used in this paragraph.

Topic sentence
Room 323 in Alexandria Hall is not a pleasant place to study.

Major points
1. the way it looks
2. the way it sounds
3. the way it feels (temperature, chairs)

Concluding sentence
Because room 323 is unattractive in appearance and in comfort, it is not a good location for a student to study.

(topic sentence) Room 323 in Alexandria Hall is not a pleasant place to study. (point 1) A good study area should be attractive, quiet, and comfortable; room 323 is lacking on all of these points. Room 323 has harsh, fluorescent lighting, which is not pleasant to the eyes. The light is overly bright and makes the room look very ugly.  The tiles on the ceiling are stained with water and mildew. The paint is peeling on the walls, which could make a student feel as if she is studying in an abandoned building. (point 2) In order to study well, a student needs a quiet environment. Room 323 has an annoying hum that is very distracting. There are often maintenance workers who are using loud equipment, and it is clearly audible because the windows are not sealed well.  (point 3) The temperature in room 323 is certainly not conducive to studying because it is much colder in that room than it is in other rooms and buildings. A student often needs a blanket or a jacket in order to feel comfortable in room 323. The room also lacks comfortable seating; the chairs are narrow and are not padded well. In addition, the chairs roll, so they are not particularly stable and move when a student shifts his weight.  (concluding sentence) Because room 323 is unattractive in appearance and in comfort, it is not a good location for a student to study.